Should i send him this ?

is it good? need some fixing? or too bad?



i look at the moon

stare at the stars in the sky

i can only think about you

and it just makes me cry

why cant i have u?

just look once in your eyes

why it never feels ok?

why do i have to say goodbye?



how did i fall in love with you?

u made it feel so right

and now i wont forget you

you're all i think about at night

i remember u wen i pick a rose

when i see a beautifull sight

when i look out my window

you simply never leave my mind



i just happened to love you

from the very start

and i promised my self

that u'll always have my heart



u make nothing feels wrong

every word u say is just gentle and sweet

like a little bird's song

that makes my heart skips a beat



you are what makes a song has a meaning

what makes love feels worth the pain

what makes good when its all bad

just like a warm dance in the rain

what makes the gray skies blue

and what makes the sun shines again



you're the music to my soul

the emotion i cant control

the one that i want here

u make my worries dissapear

and take away every fear

i just want u to know

you're far yet so nearShould i send him this ?
woowww....thats really good. only thing i would look at is a couple of times you used a plural of a word when it should be singular but that is a very beautiful poem.Should i send him this ?
spellcheck it first. Lots of mistakes in it
yes, its very passionet and it really expresses how you feel.

send it! :D
what the H$LL is that?
yes.
tatas good
Who is it to? If he is that important i would not only because you dont want to sound desprate.....It is a good peice of writting.
I love it. I felt your emotion in it
it might make him feel awkward. :C
awwwwwwwww thts really sweet

but mabe change the line tht says ';i remeber u when i pick a rose'; to some thing else cuz ik most guys dont like being compared to flowers but other then tht its awsome